I like how you write in first person here, you talk about sex wich makes estimulating but you are explaining the background of the story as well.
I really like this part
Thanks for sharing Jocelyn, and... yess... a lot of words written again! Congratulations!! It seem they flows!
Thank you! I'm glad you like it. Seemed a little tepid with the first part. Seems you want more romance and less straight to the action. The setting helps really excite readers and not so much the raw description.
I'm still a novice writer so I'll work on more situational and less language of what is happening. I think in images and showing from poetry. It is hard.
Umm no more romance... that's boring :-)
No love or just love and relationship and sex... people talk a lot about love and romance and thats boring, perphas a over rated concept and in a text is not interesting
I just mean that a good background story and context where the action goes make more dinamyc and interesting the history: historical like ii ww, more classical ages, with political topics behind, corruption, adventure , thriller....
And all with a high level of sex content, contec direct, explicit, knowing how characters lives and feel it... avoiding long description , just enough to understand the more primary desires and pleasure.
Of course always with pleasure and fun things.always avoiding no cliches, no weird things,no dark things...