Good feedback.

This is a good time to explain even more what I am doing.
I write books for kids and it is my plan that this becomes a chapter book.
I write 2-3 pages in Word and then stop. No more than three pages.
So that forces me to have a cliff hanger by the end of the third page. So by the third page if I don't have a cliff hanger, I better get one.
I've not outlined anything. I'm writing into the dark here.

But I now have a much better idea where it is going.

I also just find that posts that are TOO long on Steemit are hard to read, so I keep it short on purpose.

And I would always rather have the feedback that is too short, as opposed to "this is too long."

And I'm also writing this to prove to myself that I can write a decent story quickly without any planning and so far it seems to be working.

Thanks for the feedback, glad you enjoy it.