Good: Good topic, worthwhile and of universal interest. Simple and effective "plot". This is real literature; the reader departs with something of value, something that she or he will cherish, something that adds humanity. In doing this, the story provides relief from death. Overall, excellent.
Bad: If you are serious about developing as a writer, you must master English grammar and polish your writing to perfection. This draft contains several grammatical errors. Don't let this discourage you from writing; it is just an area that you might want to invest some effort into.
Thank you for writing on this important topic!
Thank you very much for the feedback. I appreciate it. This is the first time I write a short story. I used to write articles for a newspaper, but never wrote literature.
The original text was written in a different language, as English is not my first language. It might be worthwhile for me to give it to someone else for translation next time, instead of doing it myself.
The flaws in grammar are not serious. You can improve your mastery of English; just purchase a reference book such as The Elements of Style, (University of Chicago Press). Alternatively, focus on what you do best, doing it in your native language, and find a GOOD translator. The latter approach will be more effort and expense but will produce the best result. Either way, God bless you and good luck and keep writing real literature that injects humanity into our lives!