holy smoke stacks! This is brilliant!! I love how the ending is the very end, yet tells of the middle as well. I normally am a bit put off by time stamps in a story, but this works insanely well, and really adds to the building emotion. In the hour, you are able to go on this journey with her, and her choice seems worth it. A masterful ending to say the least!
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OK, so now you've made my day. I really submitted this with trepidation. It is a little unusual in style and vision. And yet--I see echoes in the response of others in the contest. You gave us great material. The character was defined, and yet she had room for growth. What would that be? Would she open the (metaphoric) door and change her life. And if she did, how would that change her? I think sometimes (always) my style can be a little lean, but that's how I am, so that's how I write. Thanks for commenting, for giving us such great material and for appreciating my modest offering.