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RE: Generate Strong Passwords With Password Generator (Privacy Friendly) v1.0.3

in #utopian-io6 years ago

Thank you for this contribution.

As is often the case with your posts, there is a discrepancy between the quality of the content and that of the presentation. It's a thorough review, which details the app's advantages and your own personal experience with it. That's all great.

But I urge you to work on your English, to go over your posts once or twice more before submitting. Let me give you a couple of examples to the kind of stuff where I think you could really improve:

This is not always the same case with some of the projects I have used. Most times, their Playstore file isn't always updated.

These two, short sentences still manage to have a great deal of redundancy. When you say "not always the case," you don't need to say "some of the projects." If it's not always the case, then it is automatically the case for only some of the projects. This would have worked better as:

"This is not always the same case with the projects I have used."

The same goes for "most times" and "isn't always" in the second sentence. You can say the Play store file isn't always updated. You can say that most times the file isn't updated. You don't need to say both.

This isn't the first app I will use that will briefly Introduce itself to its users while the installation process is ongoing.

The tenses are super confusing. "I will use" is future. But you're talking about "first," so you're obviously not talking about the future. This should have been

"This isn't the first app I have used"

You CAN use "will introduce itself" here, but it's not the best choice. A better, simpler option would be "introduces itself."

I hope this helps you in future contributions. You are a very steady contributor to the category and I would love to see you work to improve your writing.

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Thank you for your review, @didic! Keep up the good work!