At first I worried about the exposition-heaviness but after a couple of paragraphs I got into the rhythm and ended up really appreciating the dry, matter-of-fact trashonaut's voice introducing this catastrophic situation. It really heightens the emotional impact of the last act. A fantastic entry!
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Thank you, @sidequest, for reading!
Yes, Mr. Byrd is quite depressed at the beginning, and I let it be a little heavy to show why and to set up that ending... a diamond, or in this case, a super blue sapphire, shows best on a plain dark background ...