Good job! A little advice from a 71 year old writer...stick to words you're familiar with, or use a thesaurus. Headlights don't interrogate. Really, that's the only criticism I have. Good job painting the picture...I got the imagery. A few comma errors (even at 71, I make them too). I see you're fond of ellipses, I like to use them too. My overall advice...keep writing, you have a knack for it. The more you write, the better you get. And don't take failing English too hard, better writers than either one of us have been in the same predicament.
Thanks for the advice, but I meant what I said. You as a writer should know the abstract use of words like "interrogate." Most words have some leeway with regard to creative freedom. I used the word to emphasize the hardiness of the darkness as well as the brightness of the headlights. Interrogate packs more of a punch than pierce or something else. It really implies that the darkness isn't making it easy for the headlights. Although, this is all more or less up to interpretation, so you do have a good point. Anyway, yeah you should check out my other work, it's mainly poetry. This was my first attempt in like a year or two to write something non-poetry. It was a quick write after all, probably a 2-3 hour job. Thanks for your comments!
My constant poetry explains the occasional comma misuse, you know, because grammar is less of a priority with poetry.