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RE: Best Lover And Best Friend! Part # 3

in #story7 years ago (edited)

My reading leads me to the following commnet: it is poorly-written. I can barely squeeze ut any meaning at all from this text. Sentences sometimes need a verb to convey a meaning:

There were. Girl working in the company she was in love with Amir.

Would it be better to publish in your own language? I wonder if that would help or not. Somehow I doubt even that would make this even a little interesting.