Hey hey, sis. Maybe the '**' between the transition from Ary to Dori and Dori to Grayson would improve this chapter even more. Talking about the workaround we talked about with regard to headhopping.

Otherwise, this was great! I read it solely based on Ary's perspective. Everything went by like a blur and the whole party brought up anxiety bubbling to the surface.

must have been some night if you’re here!

This should be constantly ingrained into Ary's mind. I do get how feeling of inadequacy still trumps it though. I've been in her shoes so many times. Even with the encouragement, it's a tough hurdle to still get over. That line should hopefully inject some needed confidence though.