I gave a 100% upvote for this, one of the best stories so far. If you could have shortened it somewhere else, I would have added a line of suspense when the child comes in. “The boy somehow looked familiar.”
I gave a 100% upvote for this, one of the best stories so far. If you could have shortened it somewhere else, I would have added a line of suspense when the child comes in. “The boy somehow looked familiar.”
True, but i hope in capturing the sensual moment, i was able to 'bring out' Jack's paternity of the boy, more like hitting two words with one stone, considering the 300 word ceiling.