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RE: RAP CHALLENGE WEEK #5 SUBMISSION THREAD

in #rapchallenge7 years ago

Hope all is well man...

https://steemit.com/rapchallenge/@chrisgoans/rap-challenge-week-5-free-mind

Jonez...
Let the beat bump, thinking back to my adolescence
Pouring up another cup and drowning in my misconceptions of my time spent
Where have my days gone?
What am I chasing what am I getting away from?
I was blazed up raise up the shot glass high
Make a toast to the hopes of a better life
Little did I know that my plan was a big lie
Dropped out of school cuz tuition was so high
I'm just Trying to get it right dreams of a bank roll
Rubber band banks and a case full of queso
But I stay low, got a little bit of change though
Debt to the sky, piled high, oh my, just a trap that society sets to the blind eye, gotta get away, break the chains I'm a free mind
I was enslaved but it changed I'm a free mind
Chunk up a deuce say capeche with a peace sign

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Nice chill entry bro

"Dropped out of school cuz tuition was so high
I'm just Trying to get it right dreams of a bank roll
Rubber band banks and a case full of queso
But I stay low, got a little bit of change though
Debt to the sky, piled high, oh my, just a trap that society sets to the blind eye, gotta get away, break the chains I'm a free mind
I was enslaved but it changed I'm a free mind
"

Nice underlying messages here, started to dig beneath the surface

Thanks for checking it out man! I've been trying to dig a little deeper and at first I thought it was super hard being confined to only a minute long. But I think this is a great excercise in writing limiting the time because you are forced to think that much harder and attempt to make every line count in some way.

Exactly I completely agree, I'm looking forward to next week's already, this is all good practice.