Fill the Space
The Earth is in a strange place
We are surrounded
By millions of miles of space
And yet we try to keep our personas shrouded
We only have the people next to us
We should share, laugh and trust
Try to open up to everyone
Unless it's that dude in the back alley from Hong Kong
We are social animals
Yet our inventions have separated,
The ability to speak face to face
We just end up creating more space...
There's a whole universe within
That we haven't explored
Get to know each other properly
And you'll never get bored
There are millions of miles of space
Fill it with the stars we see in every face
By Ethan
2017/06/24
Disclaimer: Hong Kong was used for rhyming purposes. Do not take offence if you come from there ;)
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awesome post (Y)
Thank you :D
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a good poem and thank you for posting it
that eyed picture suddenly appeared on my desktop screen and scared the shit out of me, anyway nice poem @xxsenpaixsamaxx
XD thanks :D
My pleasure :D
I like your poem! You have the skills man! Following!
Thank you :)
" yet we try to keep our personas shrouded" love that line.
Thank you :) Today's post wasn't great, I was thinking and trying everything but I couldn't get a good one out :'|
enjoyed this :). I can't tell if you meant that you rhymed Hong with Kong or that you rhymed Hong Kong with Everyone (everywong lol)
everyone
Gotcha, that's a toughie for sure, like orange
:D
Indeed, we are mainly social animals that though we achieved a somehow evolution, we can not humanly link with each other.
Your poem is amazing, keep on going !!! (Y)
Thank You!!!
Nice poem
I posted too pls look at it and upvote
Follow me at @pikachu01
I'll check it out :D
https://steemit.com/poetry/@pikachu01/a-salute-to-our-soldiers
Thankyou
You are indeed an old soul with great insight to what changes are occurring in this time. Ethan, just in the past few weeks, I've seen so much growth in you. You actually are becoming a freer spirit with deeper wisdom. Embrace this gradual opening of your inner self. I love the lighter expression in your poem. It was a brighter and hopeful step upward! Thank-you for your post.....Cabbagepatch
Thank you :D I was happy while writing today so I guess it just flowed in, I love the comments you leave, they leave me with a smile every time ☺
And you leave me with a sense of satisfaction and happiness with your real expressions of inner self. Realism is one of the characteristics lacking in people today. You really have a gift that should be nurtured and cherished. I believe you will reach a higher level!
Thank you! hope you have a good evening/day further :)
THANK YOU! I have nothing to add :). Just great!
Thank you :)
Good job buddy, sometimes we have to realize whats right under our noses.
Thanks, so often we oversee what is right there and it's really ashame
So true my friend, just posted another, hopefully I get more views with this one, Im proud of it. Steem on
I saw it, It's amazing ♥
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There are millions of miles of space
Fill it with the stars we see in every face
Damn, that's a philosophical one :D!
;D
An aerial with vast space of continuum searching to be with...
A bit better today?
It feels fine.
Okay :)
Your poem was indeed
quite of a tranquil read
yet let me add a grain of salt
hoping you won't take it as a bolt
finding a soul mate, a companion, a friend
often requires much more than free land
Yeah I understand, it takes hard work and perserverance but you still need to open up :)
I'm considering myself lucky that I wasn't drinking anything because when I read this: "Try to open up to everyone
Unless it's that dude in the back alley from Hong Kong" I burst out laughing.
But yes, you make a really good point. How strange that with the technological advancements that enabled us to communicate with more people, we ended up more closed off from each other.
Im glad you enjoyed it :) tech has it's ups and downs
Nice poem, really! I wish mine were at least read. Thank you! =)
Great poem about the kind of consciousness we should all aspire to! I can't help but note, on an editing level, that the "millions of miles" should have the pronoun "them" instead of "it" in the last line, but forget about that: great work!
Thank you, my english isn't that great
No worries at all! That makes the poem more extraordinary, in fact.
really good!
Thank you ^^
Nice piece
I laughed :)
because of the Hong Kong bit, truly for rhyming reasons xD...
I do this too.. and sometimes I pick a word and think
Well done on such success with your poetry :) This gives me motivation!
Congratulations @xxsenpaixsamaxx
You took 88 place in my Top 100 of posts