This sounds really cliché "cried oceans of tears" the metaphors are really tired. The poem itself isn't bad, it just needs to be more original. Try putting more thought into the different metaphors you use.
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It's imperfect yes! That's the way I want it to be
I know how much time you put in writing this poem, so thank you for the effort. ^_-