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RE: MAKE ME YOUR WORLD

in #poetry7 years ago

This is a sweet poem it has a light touch and is all in all enjoyable. For some reason the last two stanzas feel a bit off though, although the imagery is good but it to me just feels like they are not as centred as the others ...

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Yes, thanks, nice to have you read it
I think why you feel it's off is because it lacked the rhymes like the other stanzas

most likely yes now as you say it lol the flow is different because of it ...