I enjoyed your poem, however I felt the rhyming takes away from it. At least from my perspective! The end rhymes felt forced, and I feel if you broke the rhyme scheme your thoughts would flow stronger. Just an idea =)
I would love some feedback on my poem!
https://steemit.com/poem/@sixshot/alesia-poem
Yeah so I was told, I was pretty beat when I wrote this XD I will do better in my next one