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RE: Warm is My Heart

in #poetry7 years ago (edited)

I enjoy your free verse, and your flow of thoughts and emotions. For me the ending can be stronger though, "I think need a help" could be altered to provide a more powerful ending.

"Please... where am I?"
"A helpful embrace..."
"Just your touch."

Something like that, food for thought=)
Curious on your thoughts about a poem I just wrote, I think you'll like it!
https://steemit.com/poetry/@sixshot/last-desserts

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Wow...
I get ur point.
Thanks