Broken with Meaning. New to poetry, would love any feedback

in #poetry7 years ago

They said it would result in heartbreak

Don’t bother with the effort

Like the tale of Cleopatra

It’s a hopeless endeavor

But you took aim for the coveted Prize

You thought it was meant to be

You refused to realize it was an illusion

Until the stark descent into the fatal conclusion

You did not accept when they said that Love

Is not something one cannot seek out nor achieve

As in the innocence and the beauty of a white dove

After each heartbreak, you went to retrieve

Retrieve your broken hopes

Struggling to get back to the base of stability

Climbing up the ropes against their societal flow

Until you were face to face with your greatest foe

They would say you will move on

Even as your heart felt as though

It was subjected to a thousand raging radiant suns

Even as your mind and heart fought as foes

Your better judgement said no

But your actions said yes

You wondered, would they ever know

The mess they have created

A mess of heartbreak

Love stories that would never come to be

For your own sake

You bow to them and do nothing but agree

Agree with their cliché thoughts and ideas

Accept that it was just the lust of mystery

Like the coveted land of Pangea

Accept it as a forgotten history

They will never see how you felt

But you will bear the scars

Just as the great Teddy Roosevelt

They will read about your journey in memoirs

Knowing everything you have been through

Was not for naught

Your feelings chained as in a zoo

It was love you sought

It was not acceptance you fought for

You did not seek validation from society

You were the ever so elusive exception

Grounded only by the cruel unforgiving grasp of gravity

While it may not be not clear now

You are worthy of it all

So take a bow

You made it through it all

Broken yet alive

Broken yet breathing

Broken yet you survived

Broken yet with meaning

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