I enjoyed this one quite a lot. The rhyme felt effortless (except the third stanza, but I will let that slide). I will leave you a comment on Discord on some other feedback which may not be appropriate as a comment here.
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Well it is fine man I accept criticism. That third stanza may be just needs "rearranged" :P and it works. I like your skill to spot up flaws and edit. :p You are for sure our main editor of our future publishing house. Because that is the next step I am going to make until the end of the year :)