Through autumn woods
With rain slanting,
Dampening everything.
I pass a man
On his cell
Tell his lover
He won’t be home,
Perhaps, forever,
While the stream
of forgetfulness
winds
through the trees
obliterating
autumn
lovers
and leaves…
I am adamant.
It will not obliterate me.
There are many shades
On the path today,
Grim and soulless
Wandering alone,
I’d stop and talk
But the sky
Looks threatening,
And even my pup
Is tugging me home.
There is no boatman
In this sodden Hades
But there is a bridge
And shadowy mist
I would not forget you
If I walked
For centuries,
If my eyes
Became dim
From loneliness.
Others may drink
From the stream of forgetfulness,
Losing their voice
And memories…
But I will pass
Through the gates of the forest,
Adamantine,
Impervious
And I will remember
Your autumn colors,
Shining brightly
In the winter wind
And I will walk
If it takes forever
To find you
And bring you
Home again.
You walk on the way
You tolerate the winter with the rain,
Your old memories are calling you,
The sound of your lover is coming
away in the forest .
Beautiful poetry 👌👌
Thanks for sharing
a very poetic response...thanks, @lalitswami
Nice work buddy
thanks
Wow. Good poem! Like you captured something very real, the essence of autumn perhaps. Had to read it over and over. Captivating!
thanks, jonas
Epic. Painted with such soulful references and tied into modern times, this piece speaks volumes to the heart. Great work. :)
thanks, Tina . I hoped people would get the classical allusions
upvoted bro ^_^
thanks blu
nice read.
thanks
Wow! Heady stuff! I love the optimism of the ending. Resteemed!
thanks, @dabeckster
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Great post.
The pictures is bravo👏
thank you
I can hear his laboured breathing through your words and can feel his unstoppable determination, pressing through the physical and emotional barriers.
Well done @johnjgeddes. Well done.
thanks, @countrygirl :)
Read it thrice and got mixed feelings( sad, confident, losing self, walking again). I am still not able to find the depth of your poem.
Good work @johngeddes
I too have written some lines
https://steemit.com/poetry/@neelamgahlyan/a-dream-i-want-to-come-true
Feedback is much appreciated.
thank you
a touch of an old soul and young mind, love it this is great poem my friend , you get an upvote
thank you, @joendegz
Love that last two lines
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Breath taking! Beautiful work as usual ❤️
poetry in motion.
thanks
Poignant!