I came to you with my heart in my hand
and thoughts that I could be a better man.
Trying to change all of my wicked ways,
but losing myself in a fevered craze.
Changing myself and disguising the rest;
Playing up parts that I think you'll like best.
The closer I got, the further it seemed,
this connection was ever what I dreamed.
This had become a game of silly boasts
about which one of us gave up the most.
It's rather silly, these masks we flaunted
are all that kept us from what we wanted.
Deep.. I definitely resonate with this one quite a bit.
Happy to hear from you bro, and even more glad that the comment actually makes sense in this sea of seemingly google translated auto-responses....
Word! You're one of the people I like more on here and I even put your name on my list of peoples pages to check out more, so.. I've been meaning to do that though in this case I stumbled onto your poem in my feed. Just been so busy working on this contest thingy, though I hope to get back to spending more time checking out other peoples pages, it's important and for me at least makes the steemit experience much deeper.
Also yeah! Hah.. There's a lot of bots or whatever just copy pasting comments, it's annoying.. But oh well. It is what it is. Before long the robots will be taking many of our jobs and who knows maybe we'll even have some kind of Terminator or Matrix-esque future. Those machines are becoming more and more normal! heh.
Touching Piece. Very Spiritual. Followed for more interesting reads!
Currently designing my roommates first chapbook. Ill drop the cover art designed by myself. Let me know If I can help you out in any way with graphics.
-Hayden Franks
An honest heart-felt poem. Yes I have been there too. The face may look fractured and masked but the heart will go on. i write poetry as well and lost my sweetheart to death a year ago. It is a blessing to express yourself through poetic words that live on. Out of sadness and frustration grows life and beauty. Nicely written my friend.
Thanks, it feels like the hardest lessons are the ones we needed to learn the most in some respects. Learning to let go is never easy and I certainly don't envy how any of us go about it.
Nice words at the sunday morning - you got my upvote and resteem! Let's go on and have "fon"!
Excellent poem @clayboyn
'A good poet is someone who manages, in a lifetime of standing out in thunderstorms, to be struck by lightening five or six times; a dozen or two dozen times and he is great.'
'Poetry is not a turning loose of emotion, but an escape from emotion; it is not the expression of personality, but an escape from personality. But, of course, only those who have personality and emotions know what it means to want to escape from these things.' love the way you described belessing to you @clayboyn
It is so very true. I'm a little speechless. I take this 2 ways. One way can be love about yourself and how you feel others should see you. The other being consumed by the person you love that you 'make' the changes they want to see, but the 'mask' hides the truth and when that happens a relationship is doomed.
I could be way off base to...but that's the feeling I get from it. Thank you :)
Nice! This actually reminds me of Realistic Poetry on Twitter were the admin posts a photo and subscribers get to post original poetry related to that photo. Maybe I should start something like that here as well.
poetry is very cool @clayboyn, I like, for me the poetry would be great if we mix with the music, everyone who heard it would be more comfortable soul. I often hear poetry when I am stressed again. thank you... :)
Wow. I didn't go into reading this with any expectations but was really impressed with how you were able to paint a vivid picture of the conversation/relationship here -- it really resonated with me. Very nice work.
Did you look for the image after writing, or were you inspired by the picture?
Thanks! I always just write and then look for an image that fits unless I'm working with an artist. The collabs I've done with @juliakponsford seem to evolve at the same time. Thanks for checking it out!
Very cool! I just started getting into the art prompt contests and love them. This month's is really challenging but fun: https://steemit.com/contest/@gmuxx/htym9-art-prompt-writing-contest-8
Any advice on great people to follow or other contests in this space? I am following TWB and the great work they're doing, but looking for as many writing-related accounts and groups as possible. Thank you.
Poetry Dice Challenge 3000.Check out @robyneggs for the
Thank you!
"I came to you with my heart in my hand
and thoughts that I could be a better man.
Trying to change all of my wicked ways,
but losing myself in a fevered craze.
Changing myself and disguising the rest;
Playing up parts that I think you'll like best"
Is this based on real life experience? Coz if it is, then we've both had the same experience.
Sometimes, when we love people, we're scared they'll leave us if they see us for who we are. So we curate ourselves like posts on steemit, upvite the parts we are proud of and down vote every other.
Only problem is, we stifle ourselves, our lives, our essence in that way. Like you noted:
" It's rather silly, these masks we flaunted
are all that kept us from what we wanted."
The more we try to hide ourselves in order to connect with the ones we care about, the more shallow whatever connection we have will become
Deep poetry
All of my poetry is definitely based on my own experiences. Thanks for checking it out!
has a profound touch and very relatable
Great content. Upvoted by @eastcoaststeem ran by Steemian @chelsea88. My goal is to support east coast Steemians through manual curation and facilitation of steemit positive initiatives.
a great poem!! That's why they say don't get too close to anyone, that you could sense their greys and start giving up on them :)
Very nice poem.
Wow fantastic post.
In a world awesome poem
amazing...
so nice.
thanks @clayboyn:-) for your nice post
really amazing love poetry .
@clayboyn you making this ?
Yes, I only post original poetry that I make or collab with.
Fantastic and lesson post
Weakedness or goodness can't be changed after death so it's better to be good before death
hello darling, wowwww what amazing poetry, really interesting Im huge fan of anime my name is @emanuelmedina and Im painter too. Huge fan of your blog
this a good writing the poetry is amazing