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RE: Poem / Untitled

in #poetry7 years ago

Hi - and my belated wishes for the new year.

A jump into the air.
I couldn't care less if peopled stared.

A jump into the air.
I couldn't care less if people stare.

Stared changes the tense, like causing a glitch in the reading of it...peopled is not what you mean - it means there were people...

Gosh, you are worse than me, I wasted an entire year before telling the girl I care...

Once you've answered, I'll delete the correction suggestion

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Thank you, you don't have to delete the suggestion :D . I knew that she was important to me but it was only this December that I really understood just how important, I won't waste any more time keeping feelings to myself :D I actually plan on taking her out this weekend, which is a good chance to tell her my feelings.