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When the winner is announced Friday 25th of August the amount will be determined.
The rules are simple
- You must upvote and resteem this post.
- You write the next paragraph of the story in your comment, the story so far is presented below.
- The paragraph must be at least 100 words long.
- The reply with the most upvotes on their comment after five days is the winner and their paragraph is added to the story. So please get your followers and friends to vote on your paragraph.
- The winner will receive a share of the total upvotes of this post.
- In the event of a tie, the previous weeks winner will have the casting vote.
He stood up and looked out of the window. (@scottish01)He no longer concerned himself with the sickly amber light that seeped through the panes. Whatever radioactive death the mysterious star that had replaced the sun brought, it would not reach them in time. Picking up his binoculars, he let his gaze fall to the ocean, stretched out hundreds of feet below their dream home: A glass palace built into the side of the cliff at a cost of $123.6 million. The not-quite-humanoid creatures that had crawled from the sea on the third morning following the arrival of the new sun, had made their way a good 100 feet up the rocks now. The tentacles that dripped from below cold, steel shark eyes, reached out probing the stone for handholds. They would be here within hours. He looked back toward his wife, huddled on the Italian leather sofa, arms about their small son. Her own eyes were as cold as the creatures' climbing the cliff wall. He knew what she was thinking. I wanted a house in the mountains.(@jrhughes)
Chase turned his eyes from her steely gaze. If these were his last minutes on Earth, heβd be damned if he was going to spend them under silent accusation. He poured two more fingers of bourbon into his freshly emptied highball glass. The crystal decanter was thick, and the pale alien rays refracted off its hatched edges. The bottle was still half full of liquor. He imagined stuffing one of the overpriced dish towels his wife had purchased into the container. At 110-proof, the world around him could be turned to oak barrel aged flames and razor-edged shards. He wondered if the things below could burn. (@horrorguyian)
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Good luck everyone
Thanks to @ryivhnn for his creativity and generosity in giving me this, check out his excellent posts.
The completition is hotting up nicely and as a result of @blocktrades we have a nice pot for the winner.
Remember that the reply with the most upvotes on their comment after five days is the winner and their paragraph is added to the story. So please get your followers and friends to vote on your paragraph.
At the moment @xusayz is winning with 3 votes!
@xusayz 3 votes
@bigdave2250 2 votes
@jessiemccartney 2 votes
@mikepm74 1 vote
Great work, thanks for entering.
Thanks for the opportunity
"Burn! We should set a fire trap to burn these creatures. Think of that. Think of some way to save us, fast! You are responsible for all this, aren't you? " his wife's words cut through his thoughts. He turned to her, his defeated eyes silently pleading understanding and forgiveness, before looking away again. "If we'd gone to live in the mountains like you wanted, Momma, we would have been safe, wouldn't we, Momma? And Daddy wouldn't have been so upset as he is now. He'd be playing with me instead." their 4 year old son spoke up for the first time since morning, pulling the mother's face towards him with his little hands. Hearing his son's voice, Chase shook out of his reverie and sprung to action. There was no time to be lost. If he had to die, if they had to die, they would die fighting!
Great entry, thanks for entering
Thanks for the opportunity, @scottish01! :)
I really like your next paragraph concept.
so where is the next pagagraph?
I can hardly wait and no I wan't going to turn it into a girly novel lol
I'd like to have a go at the next para too @scottish01. I'm also unable to wait. :)
In the meantime, I've fleshed out what I already wrote. If I win, please consider this more descriptive version as my edited entry.
"Burn! We should set a fire trap to burn these creatures. Think of that. Think of some way to save us, fast! You are responsible for all this, aren't you? " his wife's words cut through his thoughts like a sharp knife cutting through melting cheese. His stomach grumbled suddenly. Momentarily, his thoughts turned to food. It had been a long time since he had eaten. He looked at the highball glass in his hand. It could do with another refill. Slowly, as if being pulled by a fragile string, he turned back towards her, his wife of seven years. His defeated eyes silently pleaded understanding and forgiveness. But, all his eyes met were a steely cold gaze, unforgiving in its emotion, and unwavering in its intensity. He couldn't bear to look at her, much less answer her. He looked away again, gazing out of the window, desperately wishing he had paid heed to his wife's wishes. "If we'd gone to live in the mountains like you wanted, Momma, we would have been safe, wouldn't we, Momma? And Daddy wouldn't have been so upset as he is now. He'd be playing with me instead." their 4 year old son spoke up for the first time since morning, pulling the mother's face towards him with his little hands. And it was then that Chase had an idea!! Hearing his son's voice, Chase shook out of his reverie and sprung to action. There was no time to be lost. He had to think of something. If he had to die, if they had to die, they would die fighting! He was suddenly like a firecracker that had been ignited. He felt a wave of energy and determination wash over him. His wearied mind became energized as fresh ideas engulfed him. Could those things below burn?
@scottish01, thank you very much. Please do check out my edited more descriptive paragraph below and see if you'd like to have that as the 3rd next para. It is a more descriptive version of the para I submitted originally. Thank you again for the opportunity. I'm super thrilled to have my para chosen!! :)
It was my pleasure, thank you for entering :-)
As he contemplated the possibility of creating the worldβs most expensive Molotov cocktail, a high, piercing screech drew Chaseβs gaze back to the window. One of the creatures he had no seen previously had reached the home ahead of his counterparts. Sharp, needle like talons scratching at the glass to get in. Up close the creature looked like Michael Crichton had taken a scene out of βThe Flyβ, Put Jeff Goldbloom in one side of the teleporter, and a velociraptor in the other. The resultant half human half dinosaur monstrosity would make quick work of Chase and his family once he broke through the storm resistant glass.
I googled Jeff Goldbloom Velociraptor and the internet did not disappoint. Hahahaha
Image source: http://www.tshirtvortex.net/sexy-jeff-goldblum-raptor/
Love it, great entry and thanks for the other post as well :-)
Chase quickly thought better of Wasting the perfectly aged bourbon on such a futile attempt. So he searched his mind instead for something that could actually work "if only Dave were here he would know what to do" he said in that familiar voice in his head. But Dave his ex navy seal body guard wasn't there. The next thought was of how utterly unfair this all was for Ethan his young son and then immediately to his distain for Desiree his once beautiful wife. She had been everything he wanted in a woman but that was before he had made his fortune in cripto and she got all caught up in being what everyone thought a rich house wife was supposed to be.
Great entry, thanks for entering.
He turned his eyes to his not so loving wife while taking a huge gulp of the burbon. How did it come to this? When did it come to this? He looked at her saw her beauty, her frailty , her anger, the sadness deep within. Suddenly the past came alive again. The past was there in an instant, in that instant he was transported back to the time they met. He was walking along Main Avenue in Westbank. A small town they had both grown up in. It was a beautiful summer day the sun shining brightly in the deep blue sky it was hot so very hot ,he was sweating even though it was but ten am. but in that country its always very hot at that time of day. so hot not even the birds want to fly. The sweat was clouding his gaze and he did not see the woman come out of the salon. He was engrossed in his thoughts of his dreams, his visions, his nightmares. Even though the sweat was pouring off his body he was chilled, chilled to his very core. He knew they were comming. He just knew. He could feel it within his very soul. It chilled him to the core of his being. Hello Chase, we will see you soon is all he could hear. That voice, oh my God, that horrible grating, rhaspy voice, was all he could hear it was deafning. Walking as if in a trance, Chase was broken out of his waking nightmare by Her. Yes it was her. The one he had seen in is nightmares. So beautiful, so fragile, so strong, "Are you okay?" Chase took a deep breath. It was a swift move from the waking nightmare to this reality. Pardon me ? I asked if you were alright. Yes I am fine. I was just a bit worried she said you looked like you were in some kind of shock. Chase looked at her questionly. I'm a Paramedic and it appeared like shock symptoms to me. Chase laughed , No I am fine just the heat you understand? Make sure you are drinking enough water, here take this one ,I have not opened it yet. I will watch while you drink it. I am fine said Chase dont worry about me. Part of the job description she laughed. The daylight began to dim and the clouds began to form although she did not see it Chase did. It grabbed him in its gentle hands and took him down, down, down. The last thing Chase heard is are you alright as he slipped beyond this life into a waking nightmare.
Great entry, really liked it :-)
figured I'd give it a go. never done anything like this before didn't count the words hope its enough xo
I'm glad you did give it a go, great entry, I really enjoyed it :-)
thank you very much :)
Yo, Iβd jump in but I know Iβm gonna lose as always, ha ha.
You'll always be a winner to me ;-)
Besides you need to be concentrating on your novel, I haven't seen any new chapters....
Thanks, mate.
Youβre spot on about the novel. Iβd love to get down to editing and release the trilogy on Steemit, but without substantial support, soon Iβm gonna have to wind down my operations here and get another part-time job while my savings are running out. That may be the end of it, I suppose.
Fug it, life would be so good if we didn't need money!
yeap
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Great idea, don't think I'd be any good at doing this though!
Welcome back, I was getting worried about you ;-)
Thanks for stopping by and I hope you are having a nice evening :-)
Hi looks like your competition is doing well that's good...
I'm delighted, so far so good :-)
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STOPHow did you color 'π²π²π²' ?
Would you believe it is just an emoticon from my Samsung phone.
I didn't know you can put pics in the title.
Yeah I've saw a few over the last few days
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