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RE: I feel indebted

in #newlife7 years ago

A very thoughtful poem, I think it grows more powerful as it progresses. That being said, the first line I think could be made stronger to provide precedence for the final two lines. Perhaps even tie in something about a new dawn at the end!

"Night, reveal your silence. I've seen the reflections in the dark,"
Something like that, food for thought!

I'm curious on your thoughts about my recent work, I think you'll like it!
https://steemit.com/poetry/@sixshot/last-desserts