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RE: Welcome Pages on Our Front End: Please Help Proofread! WE NEED YOU!

in #naturalmedicine5 years ago

Heya @riverflows – didn't have time to read through all of it, but caught a few things in the very beginning!

In this paragraph, the first part sounds incomplete, and it becomes a run-on sentence. Either remove ‘a’ or add ‘platform’. Adding a semi-colon after ‘health’, then an em dash ( – ) after ‘spirituality’ helps break it up by creating natural pauses. Also, add a dash and 3rd 'e' to ‘earth-centered.’ :)

  • Natural Medicine is (a) social media (platform) for enthusiasts of natural health; from herbalism and essential oils to food as medicine, meditation and spirituality — as well as the relationship of human beings to the natural world through wild-crafting, permaculture and other 'healthy' (earth-centered) practices.

Here, you’ve incorrectly used an apostrophe to make ‘its’ possessive. Common mistake! Not sure what’s happening in the sentence after that...the end of the sentence doesn’t make sense (and also has an incorrect apostrophe in ‘its’) —
‘and the it's link to the STEEM platform.’

  • Below you'll find some more information about the various intricacies of Natural Medicine, (its) reward system, and (the it's link to the STEEM platform.) For more information, please feel free to join our Discord by clicking here. There’s always a friendly person to help you out!
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AN INCORRECT APOSTROPHE!! DYING OF SHAME AND EMBARRASSMENT!! HOW THE FLIPPING HECK DID THAT HAPPEN!!! AAAAgggh... thankyou honey. LOTUS coming your way - sooo appreciated!