You are pretty proficient in English, there are only minor mistakes but you have time to learn to fix them. English is very important in life and even learning a second foreign language is advised, don't skip it or be superficial about it. I still regret not paying 100% attention in French.

The story is excellent and it captures the atmosphere. You can learn different storytelling mechanisms by joining a group specialized in writing in English, The Writer's Block: https://discord.gg/PnE99A

Also, something that helped me when at the beginning was that writing and maintaining a blog means that you need to spend 25% of the time documenting, 25% of the time writing and 50% of the time talking and promoting your writing.