I like the premise of this. at present it feels like the work up for a story, where you have laid out the structure and key points.
the structure at present is very immediate in telling us what happens. For me, I'd like you to delve into experiencing it as the characters do, and showing us what they see, feel, and go through.
I really hope you have this as a piece to work on further
I like the premise of this. at present it feels like the work up for a story, where you have laid out the structure and key points.
the structure at present is very immediate in telling us what happens. For me, I'd like you to delve into experiencing it as the characters do, and showing us what they see, feel, and go through.
I really hope you have this as a piece to work on further
Wow. I was on the edge of my seat not knowing what to expect. I'm glad it turned out well.
I'm actually reading this before I sleep. 😁🤣🤣
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