Hello @doubleworld. What an interesting story. I like you description of the characters and scenes where the action is taking place. I'm happy that the outcome was the evil Raccoon was destroyed.

I have a suggestion. You place the phrase such as:

Zaku said

On the next line with the start of another conversation or action.

Why not move those type of phrases that complete the last conversation at the end of that sentence, such as:

"Don't be silly doggie,
Just because your masters improved your speed doesn't mean you stand a chance against me," Zaku said as he released multiple fireballs at Knine simultaneously.

Then start your next thought or paragraph.

Take care.

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