Hello @zyzymena,

Your idea for a ring that can see the future is interesting. You certainly describe the grimy basement well. When Timmy discovers the ring we are prepared for an unusual event. The scene where his mother finds him is convincing. It is less convincing that he will see a cure, the science world will believe him and all will work out fine. This direction of the plot would need more detailed development to be convincing. The kind of sweeping description you give is not persuasive.

Also, where does John come in? Is he Timmy's father? This is not explained in the story.

This is well written. You have a good idea and a knack for description. We just need a bit more development to bring the story home for the reader.

Thank you for sharing this with us, @zyzymena.