This piece shows promise but needs to be developed a bit more and for you to use more show than tell and more dialogue to draw us in, make us feel part of the story, and be invested in its characters. Take a look at this post here: Show don't tell for guidance. We also remind you to support at least two other stories in The Ink Well for each one that you wish to share with us. We require writers to support each other if they wish to secure support from The Ink Well.

Thank you for sharing a story from your life with us in the community.