You create a good story with a strong character at its center. Not only do we know Annabelle, but we also know Jacob. Readers hope as the story progresses that Annabelle will have the courage to do the right thing. Collapsing a birthday cake provided the moment she needed.

Your internal dialogue is good, as is your external dialogue. Thank you for sharing this story with us, @tozill. We appreciate that you engage with other authors in the community.