This is a tale which reminds the reader that a person is more than their physical limitations. Your wording here is stunning: great detail has been taken to define each moment. However, your story takes on a pure narration feel at certain points, which pulls us from the storytelling. You might learn from an article in our catalog of fiction writing tips called Show, Don't Tell.

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