This is an interesting tale, which traces how history repeats itself. We believe that adding some dialogue between your characters, as well as some action, would really make this story come to life!
These are two important elements of quality fiction. You have done a very nice job with the narrative, but it would be even better if you told some of the story in action, and added dialogue so the characters speak to each other. Here are a few resources for you:
Please also note, this is a writing community, we ask that all of our authors engage in the work of others in The Ink Well. Thank you for sharing your story with us!