You build Brianne’s hesitations into a palpable tension which reveals itself in the details of each scene. A wonderful use of 'show don't tell'! Although the ending is almost begging for more finality to it, there is also much to be said for letting the reader think what they may. Thank you for sharing your story with us, and for your engagement with other members of the community.
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Thank you, I wanted the end to be where she realizes what she really wants and the decision she makes in her head - like the daydream was the turning point, but I think I made it too subtle.