This is a touching story, Hazmat, with lovely sentiments. We should all encourage our children to pursue their dreams. Allow them the opportunity to strive and flourish in areas that bring them joy. Stifling those passions will dampen the spirit and could cause immeasurable harm in the long term to their sense of confidence and self-worth as well as to our relationships with them.

You could do a few simple things that would elevate your piece: Edit it for grammar and spelling before publishing, and proof read it. Consider not placing similar phrases close to each other as it feels repetitive and a little overkill. eg: the use of interesting and interest, and the use of all Jimmy knew and All he knew. It impacts the flow of the piece. Try using Google docs or Grammarly to identify some easy corrections. I hope you find these suggestions useful.

Thank you for writing in The Ink Well.