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RE: Safe and Sound: Redefining Friendship Beyond Assumptions

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It's always gratifying to discover the real gems in society. I'm sure you have developed some wonderful relationships as a result of your outward respect for women and your ability to make them feel safe and secure. This was a nice piece which I enjoyed reading. It was just a little on the short side at 602 words long and would have benefited from some more development. We don't really see a conflict and resolution in this piece. It would also have been good to see a little more show than tell - so showing us how safe and secure women feel around you through, for example, their body language, and sharing an incident with us that shows the impact that you had for them in that moment. Thank you for sharing a story from your life in The Ink Well.

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