You have done well here to detail a life of pain, which has led Salima to internalize the force of destruction. However, with the introduction of Halim's character, it would have been nice to see some additional character development.
Here's a tip for you: Consider adding some dialogue between your characters, as well as some action.
These are two important elements of quality fiction that can bring a story to life. You have done a very nice job with the narrative, but it would be even better if you told some of the story in action, and added dialogue so the characters speak to each other. Here are a few resources for you:
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