You've taken a really interesting approach with this story, @adaopara. In just a few paragraphs, we see a man go from his birth to his death!

Since you are still new to The Ink Well, here are some important pointers for you.

Please be sure to read The Ink Well community rules at the top of The Ink Well community home page. We expect everyone who publishes in our community to be an active member of our community and to read and comment on the work of other members. The Ink Well is devoted to encouraging quality fiction writing and community engagement.

Also, The Ink Well has some great resources in our catalog of fiction writing tips. For example, we have tips on developing characters in your stories, and integrating action, dialog and narrative. These resources can help you learn how to include the important elements of fiction in your stories.

Good luck and keep writing!