This had me hooked. I was really enjoying it as there were so many interesting facets and side stories. It's unfortunate that with short story fiction !LOLZ we have to zone in so much and lose some of the interesting layers, saving them rather for longer form. So in this respect I agree with the feedback from the Ink Well as you didn't really have sufficient available word count to give enough attention to developing all of your ideas and characters. I loved it though. You write really well! Looking forward to reading more from you🙌💗

I dropped in from Dreemport this evening. #dreemer for life