The word Boo!!! Was used with concrete alacrity.
The write-up is fantastic and I really like the fact that
"Angel was not willing to accept Raymond's plea".
This could be a nice way to present a good write-up
Wow....what an interesting way to use the word "Boo". Very creative. Raymond obviously let go of the one who would have surely not let go of him and am glad angel didn't take him back.
Raymond deserved what he got. He must live with the consequences of his actions.
He should have been there with her, it's so sad he chose to abandon her when she needed him.
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I just read your introductory post and am impressed by your references. Both @cool08 and @mrenglish are respected writers in this community. With this story, you represent them well.
The conflict between Angel and Raymond is very believable. Often, when someone moves forward in life, friends may feel threatened. They may feel they are being 'left behind'. Angel's stage fright is believably evoked in the story. Any one of us who has performed on stage can relate to that.
Your use of the prompt is ingenious. Great first story. Thank you for sharing this with us. One aspect of writing for the Inkwell that is important is engagement. Look around at other stories writers have offered this week. Read them and comment. This will help them and will also help you to develop your skills.
Welcome to the Inkwell, @officialvictor. You begin your participation in this community with a well-developed story. You have a strong narrative arc and strong character development. 'Boo' as an indication of disapproval: great idea.
Your protagonist experiences more than one conflict. She must go on stage and perform. She must handle her relationship with Raymond. And, she must deal with her grandfather's illness. In each case, your resolution is sensible.
Thank you for sharing this story with us. We are happy to greet you warmly as a new writer in the community. Please review our rules to ensure that your experience here is trouble free.
It is like every of us who have such moment of hteir life, important and have to do that step like to perform, to know that we are ready but also to have a bit of hesitation. It is important to grab a chance and just to try our strengh. Well written story!
The word Boo!!! Was used with concrete alacrity.
The write-up is fantastic and I really like the fact that
"Angel was not willing to accept Raymond's plea".
This could be a nice way to present a good write-up
Wow....what an interesting way to use the word "Boo". Very creative. Raymond obviously let go of the one who would have surely not let go of him and am glad angel didn't take him back.
Raymond deserved what he got. He must live with the consequences of his actions.
He should have been there with her, it's so sad he chose to abandon her when she needed him.
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Welcome, @officialvictor
I just read your introductory post and am impressed by your references. Both @cool08 and @mrenglish are respected writers in this community. With this story, you represent them well.
The conflict between Angel and Raymond is very believable. Often, when someone moves forward in life, friends may feel threatened. They may feel they are being 'left behind'. Angel's stage fright is believably evoked in the story. Any one of us who has performed on stage can relate to that.
Your use of the prompt is ingenious. Great first story. Thank you for sharing this with us. One aspect of writing for the Inkwell that is important is engagement. Look around at other stories writers have offered this week. Read them and comment. This will help them and will also help you to develop your skills.
Keep writing :)
Wow... Thanks @agmoore . He is is good writer and he is going to be good whiie here....
Welcome to the Inkwell, @officialvictor. You begin your participation in this community with a well-developed story. You have a strong narrative arc and strong character development. 'Boo' as an indication of disapproval: great idea.
Your protagonist experiences more than one conflict. She must go on stage and perform. She must handle her relationship with Raymond. And, she must deal with her grandfather's illness. In each case, your resolution is sensible.
Thank you for sharing this story with us. We are happy to greet you warmly as a new writer in the community. Please review our rules to ensure that your experience here is trouble free.
This is your first write?? You were born for this. You know your way around this prompt and the way you use it is nothing short of brilliance.
It is like every of us who have such moment of hteir life, important and have to do that step like to perform, to know that we are ready but also to have a bit of hesitation. It is important to grab a chance and just to try our strengh. Well written story!