Thank you for your feedback, it wasn't meant to be a funny story,I meant the reader to try to figure out what might have happened.
Sorry its my first time writing a stories.
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Thank you for your feedback, it wasn't meant to be a funny story,I meant the reader to try to figure out what might have happened.
Sorry its my first time writing a stories.
Your first time! That is amazing. You did such a good job of catching my attention that I thought you were used to writing stories. You pulled the different elements together well, for a first time story writer.
Often, when people try to write stories they see a scene in their imaginations. However when they write the scene, they cannot let us, the readers, see them. I was able to imagine your story.
I happen to like stories that have a resolution, that end and don't leave me hanging. That's called completing the arc. Most stories have a beginning, a middle and an end. Stories, are driven by conflict. You certainly have the conflict. A woman running around with a bat, chasing her husband, is certainly conflict.
The next time you write for us, and I certainly hope you do, keep in mind that we don't welcome really violent stories. This one came close but since you didn't dwell on the husband's injuries and the actually smashing (ha ha), it's OK.
I'm sorry if I was rude. My comment was intended to help you form a more complete story. From your writing, it was was not evident that this was your first story. Good job for a first story.
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