It was on that lovely evening ,a witch named agazar crashed with her broomstick while traveling to her destination at the outer most part of the island and was lying so helplessly that she couldn't stand up, she shouted for help but nobody came to her rescue because she was badly 😥 injured up until she saw a young lady in her early thirty's, "hello young woman could you please help me out in this my injured state, I was just passing by which I had an accident and crashed at your island", said agazar. "I'm so sorry 💔 ma I was sent to deliver an important goods to a costomer I can't help you and besides you look like a witch so I can't help you", said the young woman to the witch
"Please lady don't judge me by my looks,I have many things to offer just please help me out or just take me to the nearest healing house so that I can be made full again ", said the witch , which she refused then the witch stabbed her rod to the ground and said to her, "for this you be done I will curse you and your people , no good thing will come out of this land by tomorrow, your farms and your crop products will rot to ashes for this sole reason of selfish attitude, I will only breakbthe curse if anyone of your people will make a rare flavoured cake that I agazar will taste and be satisfied if not the curse stands", the witch said. "You can't do anything", said the young lady and left.
It was just a sad day at the office for witch agazar,she packed her bag sorrowfully and aided her self , the next morning wasn't funny for everyone on the island, everything that the witch said happened everyone became confused and started asking questions"what's happening who did we offend ".
It wasn't long ago after the incident happened,the young lady that refused to help the witch started confusing to the people of the island about everything that happened and apologized to the people also stated the condition on which the curse will be broken. Everybody in the island started to make different kinds of cake with different flavors and brought to the witch which she ate and was not satisfied with what the people of the island brought to her, untill a little boy from the village made a white Chocolate Raspberry cake made from the little pieces of floor he got from his parents farm which was supposed to be used for his breakfast .
This gesture alone touched the witches heart which made her reconsider and reversed the curse and everything went back to normal.
This is a story that touches our hearts, as the boy's gesture touched the heart of the witch. Your plotline is clear. The young woman offends the witch. The community suffers because of the witch's revenge and the generous act of a child softens the witch's heart.
Thank you for posting this story in the Ink Well community, and thank you for engaging with other writers.
Thank you 😊 I really appreciate
All thanks to the little boy for preparing her such raspberry from his heart or else, the curse would have remains without reversing.
Nice story, but you have to make a paragraph in between the lines.
Thank I will make corrections
With the exception of the boy; most of the inhabitant of the island were selfish. They were also easy to judge just because someone looks different so I think that what happened to them is something they deserved. That said, I'm glad that there's still someone who was kindhearted among them. Good story but the wall of text and the typos makes it a little difficult to read.
The inhabitants were punished because of the selfness of the young woman so they have to bear the bear the curse ..thank you I have made corrections
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A children's story for adults, with all the usual fantasy elements.
Hello @loverboy10,
The child who uses elements from his own breakfast in order to please the witch: this ending pleases us. Your story follows a classic arc in which a misdeed is punished and a good deed compensates. You can see that readers are satisfied with the way you end the story. You probably also noticed that a few readers had suggestions about form, the way you present the story. These readers make a good point.
Telling a story is like giving a gift. Even a wonderful gift is judged partly by the way it is wrapped. Your writing moves us. It would move us even more if you polished it a bit. There are some tips about how to do that in our 'Catalog of Writing Tips'.
Writing, for me, is a great pleasure. I think it is for you, also. You tell this tale so convincingly. I would like to see you become even more effective as a writer. I think you would find even more pleasure in doing that.
I enjoyed your story. Keep writing!