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The Fall and Rise of a Hero
25,000 feet above The Great City, Burl Arj a former salaryman is in free fall. On his right hand, a relic of the Old World. A five-shot, double-action large-caliber revolver produced by Lion Armaments, firing a powerful .50 caliber cartridge. He stared up at the gargantuan spacecraft of unknown origins covering the entirety of the city. Its main cannons started to move, pointing towards his direction.
Burl smiled as he took out from his trench coat a detonator. Remembering a movie he loved, he lifted it then said, “Hasta la vista baby!” Laughing hard as pressed hard the red button.
A huge implosion resounded. After a few seconds, the entire center structure of the craft vanished; in the middle, a small black sun floats. Burl felt his descent slow down. He knows this, it was explained to him by Kat. He mused himself by quoting her, “The Anti-matter bomb once detonated will starts to produce its own gravitational pull. It will annihilate any matter that touches it creating more anti-matter particles, making itself bigger and bigger till there is nothing left to consume.”
Memories started to come in, flooding his mind, taking him back to a place he used to know. A place before these invaders from far away came and drove humanity into extinction.
The Great City was founded by the revolutionary Neo. It is the world’s capital of commerce. It is where all the nations join together to drive the boundaries of progress. Where science and technology reign. Engineering builds marvels beyond the imagination. Everything was ‘perfect’ till the skies darkened and rain of laser fire came down on the city.
The remaining survivors formed a resistance. In a last-ditch effort, they took the experimental anti-matter bomb made by scientist Bhatt then forced their way into the heart of the enemy.
They already knew the war is lost. All they have going for them is revenge, but hope showed up unusually.
Burl remembered that hope that was entrusted to him. His eyes burned with determination. He drag open his trench coat, the sight of his office attire underneath made him pause and smile. On his right side holsters an unusual gun. It has a simple design, resembles a single-shot grenade launcher. Took it out with his left hand and flicked it, breaking it in half over its hinge. Inside the barrel, a violet life-like orb resides.
He suddenly realized that his descent has stopped and he is now being pulled towards the anti-matter.
Burl turned to take one last look at the ruins of The Great City. He gritted his teeth then pointed the cannon towards the anti-matter and pulled the trigger. The orb shot out exploding a meter away from him creating a small wormhole.
”Guys, I hope ya're on the other side of this thing.” He said it with a smile on his face. Holstered the cannon then jumped in.
Inside the portal was like a corrugated tube made of condensed time and space. His body is slowly losing its shape as if his bones did not exist. He tried to shout but no voice came out of his mouth. His mind starts to spiral out of his sanity. The next thing Burl knew he was flying towards a metal trash bin; violently hitting it, but the pain was a very much welcome feeling.
He saw a glimpse of the wormhole before it vanish into thin air.
”I am not doing that again!” Burl declared as he chuckled. He put his left hand on the bin dragging himself up laughing. He then tapped at the communication link attached to his cybernetic mask, “Guys! Guys! Ya need to hear this! I came back in time to save ya’re sorry asses! Guys!
Burl’s eyes started to adjust to the darkness and his head starts to re-orient itself.
His heart raced as he realized that this place is nothing like the futuristic utopia that is The Great City. He turned his head left and right seeing nothing but rats and garbage scattered all over the abandoned alley. He started running. His legs failed him multiple times, but he drag himself up every time he fell, until he reached a ruined highway leading to a dystopian metropolis.
”Where the hell am I! This isn’t The Great City!” He exclaimed. Smashing his revolver towards a brick wall in fury breaking a part of it. A small neon sign fell, it hung a few feet above the ground by its electric cables.
Burl grimaced as he read it.
WELCOME TO ZEELIS
FIN
Thank you for reading 😁
Author's note
The #inkwellprompt is: They're here!
Genre(s): Science Fiction; Utopian and Dystopian
Added challenge is world-building... I tried feels like I am lacking.
Inspiration? Didn't have any till @dynamicrypto introduce me to a contest by @psyberx. It is a character creation challenge which is set in a dystopian background. Will be making a separate post for that, as this doesn't fit it (especially the part with the tags). I mostly use it as inspiration since it holds everything I need to make a story: Science fiction and a world to build!
I also want to thank Burl for lending me his name 🤣 and also The City of Neoxian and its Citizens.
My references that I used in creating this story: .500 S&W Magnum, Smith & Wesson Model 500, Trench Coat 🤣, Anti-matter, Luke Aikins and Sky Diving
All links go to Wikipedia.org. The pictures and the banner in this post were made or taken by myself, ©@khoola. In the cases when they were taken from other sources I stated the source in the sub-caption of the pictures.
This story does a nice job on several fronts, @khoola. You do a marvelous job of integrating action, dialog and narrative (the magic trio for a good story), even though there is only one character. Also, you did a nice job on the world building, giving an action scene in space, with the gravitational pull of the imploding anti-matter, and then the dystopian Zeelis at the end of the story.
The story is a touch hard to follow, maybe because we are not told why the narrator is in this situation and why his mission to return to the Great City fails. Even so, it's a great read!
Thank you so much!
Truth be told I want to start earlier but my vocabulary can't keep up... can't even put to words how he jump off the spacecraft in detail because of the futuristic theme. Keep messing the scenes up 😂.
Thank you so much! I really appreciate all your support!
I really enjoyed this story, @khoola. The action is fantastic. And I love the Arnold Schwarzenegger reference.
That said, there are a few gaps in narrative that would give us a more complete picture. Who are the "guys" he is speaking to? What reality was he expecting to return to when he thought he was going to the Great City, and how or why did he leave it in the first place? Also, how did his actions take him instead to the very dead Zeelis? Those were the questions I had at the end of the story.
You're a talented a writer and it's always great to read your work! I could definitely see you writing a sci-fi novel.
Thank you so much! That is too much praise 🤣, but I appreciate it, truly! 😍
Sci-fi is really hard to write for me... easy to imagine once the research is done but putting words to paper. My vocabulary is not enough 😂. Even with all that childhood playing scrabble I get lost in words 🤣.
Especially in describing something. Like I can imagine it but can't describe it 😂. that made it hard to fully tie loose ends on the story.
Guess i nee to read more Sci-fi books 😂
Again thank you very much!
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Thank you!
That nice Khoola. Is this Psyberx contest.
https://www.vybrainium.com/psyberx/@bobthebuilder2/contest-12-500-lvl-in-awards-about-68-5-hive-at-time-of-post
This is the contest 😁
oh man, you nailed this, well written and thanks for using my tag as the character, you rock! and i wish you best of luck in the psber x, you going to make the city proud....
I will do my best!
Great story about the former salaryman Burl!
Thannk you! 😁
Great story telling had me gripped to it from start to finish
Thank you very much! I really appreciate you dropping by! 😁
My pleasure to visit your post
Splendid short. This was a really good read. I enjoyed the vista created in so few words. The ending as well was unexpected. Keep up the good work.
Got here through #dreemport
Thank you!
This was great!!! However, it did leave me wanting more 🤣 I hope you will be inspired to write more sci-fi in the future 🙌
Thank you... I will try my best!
I really appreciate it that you came into my post. Sorry not been around lately too many obligations I need to attend to outside of Hive.
I totally understand, but hopefully you can find a balance :) ...
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Oh my, it's awful that Burl ended up in a Zellis instead of the Great City. I can't begin to imagine his disappointment. Neither can I imagine the shock of being in a place he knew nothing about. Now, I am wondering, @khoola, will Burl be able to make it out of here? 🥺
Well, only time can tell my dear Iska.. only time can tell *evil laugh*
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