In Five Days

in The Ink Well3 years ago (edited)

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Day 1
Monday morning, like any other Monday, like any other day. Life is such a lie. You can do this. Enjoy the process, and you will get there. Sure, until you get there and then realise there's another "there" to get to.

I jumped out of bed - 8.50 a.m. The stupid alarm clock didn't go off again. I need a new phone, I need a new life.

Late, by a whole damn hour. Definitely missing Ms Lee's class. Well, not complaining. Her monotone was as good as you not attending. Running in late, I was stuck with the new kid in the front row. He was kinda cute but in a nerdy way and kept fidgeting with his phone.

“Phones are not allowed during class,” I whispered when Ms Lee walked over to the window. He flinched and pulled his mask up. Confirmed nerd.

After class, he caught up with me and apologised.

“Sorry, that was rude,” he said hardly audible.

I looked at him, raising my left eyebrow. Not that I didn’t know what he was talking about but it was fun watching boys squirm. And the nerdy ones were even better.

“Earlier, when you told me about no phones in class?” he tried to explain.

“Yes, that was kinda rude. Just to put you at ease, I had a swab test over the weekend. I am clean.”

“Of course. I am sorry again.”

I nodded and walked away. I counted 10 steps then turned around and caught him watching me. I knew he would be. He jerked so violently, I couldn’t help but laugh, as he quickly walked away, head hanging low.

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Day 2
Again, the alarm did not go off, except this was not the day to be late. Mr John did not take too kindly to students being tardy.

I slipped into my chair just as he walked in. His eyes swept the classroom, taking in the one empty chair. I was glad it wasn't me. I've been on the receiving end of coming in after him, and it's not fun.

Why is it when someone's staring at you, it's like that look is touching you? The new nerd kid, right beside me this time. Did he know this was my usual spot?

"Let me guess, staring is a hobby of yours?"

He blushed as he turned away. I leaned over and asked him his name.

"Trey Samuels" he scribbled in his book and turned it around for me to see. So cute. Does not want to talk in class.

I leaned back into my chair as Mr John threw the marker pen on the table and looked up at us. He asked the question and the class tried not to catch his eye, except for nerd boy Trey Samuels - of course!

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Day 3
I saw him fiddling for something in his satchel just outside the school.

"Whatcha looking for? And why are you late?"

He dropped his bag and the insides spilt out. On his knees in a split second, he gathered his things. I didn't help, it didn't look like he needed it. More like, I don't think he wanted it and I'm pretty sure the book that looked like a diary had something to do with it. The kid was truly a nerd.

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Day 4
Late again, damn it!! I got up so fast, the phone dropped to the floor and the alarm went off. Are you kidding me?

"Lori!! Are you still here? You are going to be late!!"

Thanks, Mum, what would I do without you pointing out the obvious. Enough time to splash my face with water, throw on some fresh clothes and run all the way.

I wondered what I looked like running like this. I imagined the Road Runner. Ha!! I must have looked a sight. Could very well be why that idiot was honking at me. He's just so lucky I don't have the time to pick a fight. But I sure as hell was gonna give him a piece of my mind.

"Oh my God!! Will you -" wait, is that nerd boy? He pulled over and I walked over breathing hard. "Nice wheels. Your Dad's?"

"It's mine. A birthday present combined with - never mind. You want a lift?"

"Have you been waiting for me Trey Samuels? Are you going to be late for school because of me? Have you levelled up from staring to now stalking?"

How red his cheeks were. I think when I was 7-years-old, that was my favourite shade. Well, I'll take that as a sign. We hardly spoke but we made it to school just on time.

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Day 5
I feel like it's going to be a good day. I see him through the curtains, waiting in his car to give me a lift to school as he promised. The nerd and The Irritant, what a pair we make.

"Mum, I love you," I said as the door closed. I swear she almost dropped the kettle but she shouted back like an echo through the closed door.

Look at him, sitting like a good boy, waiting for his new friend.

"Trey Samuels, I do not want to go to school today. I want to go for a long drive, straight down this road, out of this town, through that winding road till we reach the lake. I want to swim in the waters and soak in the sun."

"But, but, do you have dry clothes or a towel?"

"I don't need them. Do you?"

Trey Samuels shook his head. The silly boy, so charmingly awkward. He leaned over to open the car door for me, and I left my hand resting on his for a second longer than needed. Maybe this was the start of a new friendship, a new life.

The End...

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This is for the writing challenge by @TheInkWell. The prompt this week is Winding Road. If you feel a story coming on, then click on THIS for all you need to know :D

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I can do this!!
Yes I can!! hehe
Thank you @hivebuzz :D

hehehe I loved this. ohhhh I don't know if I want it to end right here so that our hearts swell with the what ifs and maybes and can't believe its....

or READ it and be taken to the oh my goshhhhhh, so gooooooood, bravissima!!! hahahahaha

but i'm hooked either way - absolutely loved it!!!! took me right back to high school, and awkwardness and blushing and heartbeats

but know what??? he pulled his mask up. hehehehe

funny how its infected our stories now too right?? hehehehe damn that virus lol

Ah yes masks up!!
Ahhhh, one day hopefully we can look back at all this craziness and talk about how we survived it all :D

Thank you @dreemsteem
I love that you loved the story <33

Hehehe we will survive it... It will be another of those things that we endured but we will survive!! :)

An uninhibited and irritating girl notices the class nerd. An emotional hook that finds its denouement in five days despite the supposed shyness of the nerd, who, besides being intelligent, knows how to be in the right place to such an extent that they will skip class and go down the winding road. Pleasant story of adolescence, @kaerpediem

Sometimes opposites attract ;D

It's quite a trick to get inside the head of an adolescent. Many times, writers overdo it and it rings false. This time, it rings true. The rapid development of the 'romance' also rings true. There is chemistry, and there is youth. Not always a safe combination, but certainly exciting. That's what comes through here. The young lady's excitement at taking a risk, pushing what is allowed to the edge.

I like the story. I like the running dialogue Lori has with the reader. Well done!

Thank you so much @agmoore <33

This is a charming story that moves along quickly. The calendar device works well here. It helps to organize the narrative.

Thank you for sharing this story with the Ink Well community. And, thank you for engaging with other authors in the community.

Thank you so much @theinkwell :D

A true twist. I am sure the girl liked the way he conveyed his feelings. He was not a nerd but a silent lover. He was not stalking but gathering courage. Nice one!

I see you can relate to the guy ;p
Now you have made him a silent lover with courage
Definitely better labels then nerd and stalker :D

Isn't it a kind of true boyish version? 😄 None of my fault!

hahahaha
Agree 200%

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Thank you fambalam :D

Thank you fambalam ;D

What a cute story ! I love how your mind works.
Poor little geek at the mercy of this brazen little bully.
I wish that the story didn't stop here.. you always do this to me.

hahahaha
Because you can now take it wherever you want to <33

Not fair, not fair.. not fair at all 😆

I love your story, @kaerpediem. It's such a sweet coming-of-age story, with moments and glances and all the awkwardness of youth. Nicely done! I love your spare writing style.

I thought I'd mention a few little things you might want to touch up. I had a bit of confusion in the early part of the story as to who was speaking. The narrator says "Phones are not allowed during class." Then I get a little lost as to who says things things:

“Sorry, that was rude.”

“Earlier, when you told me about no phones in class?”

“Yes, that was kinda rude. Just to put you at ease, I had a swab test over the weekend. I am clean.”

“Of course. I am sorry again.”

I do like your very limited use of dialog tags. I'm a huge fan of that method. They tend to clutter up a story and be a distraction. But you might need just a few more hints as to who is speaking. I'm pretty sure "Sorry, that was rude" is the boy, because it comes right after "After class, he caught up with me and apologized." The question after that also has to be him because she's the one who said the thing about the phones. (Which means she doesn't say anything between those two statements.) That was where I got a bit confused. It must be the girl that says "Yes, that was kinda rude." But why does she say she had a swab test and then he apologizes again? One other small thing. There are a couple of places where you write "starring," which should be "staring." :-)

Anyway, it's a great story!

I confess, I was trying out a style from Florence in Ecstasy by Jesse Chaffe
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A big part of the book was told through her erratic thoughts. But after I wrote the first draft, I realised the reader was going to have a tough time understanding. So I started filling in, and maybe not enough.

ah, ok ok, I see the confusion. Thought the raising of the eyebrow to show she had no clue what he was talking about leads him trying to explain why he was apologising...

Another confession, I always mess up my spelling... let me fix it.

Thank you @jayna <33
I always appreciate your feedback :)

You're not the only one with the spelling things. The difference is you do it intentionally but I do it carelessly. I will be more careful in the future.

Thank goodness for autocorrects and Grammarly eh ;D

Same here but in my case, this is not Grammarly but autocorrect.

Happy to help! And thank you for sharing your inspiration. I love that kind of writing. I truly do. It's a challenge to master, but very effective when all those nuances are working. You are a gifted writer. I always look forward to your stories!

Oh, beautiful! It's definitely the start of a new friendship! I love your story!

It's charming and entertaining. I like the rapport between the narrator and Trey Samuel. You definitely captured the lifestyle of teenagers in captivating scenes and words.

When I got to the end of the story, I could not believe it. I wanted more! Hehe.

Well written, ma'am! 🙂

Thank you so much @kemmyb
So happy you enjoyed the story :D

This reminded me of a movie I Once watched 360 days when someone gave another this period to love her but how amazing that what took someone 1-year another was able to accomplish in 5 days.
Nice piece.

Oh yes
Something about a gangsta and I think many starting using "Baby Girl" after that hehe
I didn't watch it but I did hear about it

Ah yes, young love(or like/crush) does have a different time dial 😂

Thank you, glad you liked it 😊

This was great :) I never quite knew if this would end as a romance, horror, or a heartbreak! It kept me reading!!!

Whichever your heart fancies :D

Thank you @wrestlingdesires

Almost like I was watching a movie about teenage romance. I like the way you take us into the mind of Lori all, giving us a first-hand view of how she sees everyone around her, especially Trey Samuels.
A very interesting and captivating story. It's even more amazing with the epistolary form it takes.

Hi Hillary - how are you?
Happy you enjoyed the story :D

 3 years ago  

Hello @kaerpediem Lovely story of young girl and boy who are obviously attracted to each other. In five days their relationship develops with increasing interest and conversation.

I tend to be wordy in my dialogue and have to work on that. However, I love the shortness of yours. But just as jayna stated, I had a slight confusion as who said what in some spots; especially when talking about the test.

Overall a nice, refreshing story of young, budding friendship. And, she managed to get a ride to school out of it.

Thanks for sharing.

Thank you for that feedback @justclickindiva
I will be more aware of these moments when I think people are reading with my thoughts

Glad you liked the story :D

Some nerds especially with cars and who'd do stuff for you, aren't too bad haha
Hey, he is actually skipping school for her 😱