The citizens of Picador were experiencing some kind of plague, it was extremely contagious and had just recently begun and people were losing their lives in matter of weeks after getting the infection.
Some conspiracy theorists believed it was an experiment in order to reduce the population others called it an outbreak, the religious one's called it a punishment from God while the atheistic one's believed there was a logical explanation behind it all but i never believed in any of these, how could i when i knew what was behind it all?, i knew it was the curse that was laid many years ago.
When i was just a little niña, my abuelita told me a really scary story of the girl who cursed the whole town after she was framed by the mayor's daughter, Cathleen, who was jealous of her beauty.
Cathleen was a very spoilt child who always got whatever she wanted from her father the mayor and never liked being second to anyone in anything, her brother Paul on the other hand was a very humble and well behaved young man who happened to be in love with Selena, a simple girl who lived with her mother, an honest trader.
The town as at then was at conflict with it's neighbor town and paul was to go in his father's stead to reach a peaceful arrangement with them but before he left, he gave Selena who he'd been courting in secret, a very beautiful necklace to remember him by until he comes back.
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Cathleen who hated Selena for her superior beauty, saw the necklace on her during the period that Paul, her brother was away and wanted it to herself but she knew there was no way selena would give it to her so she went to manipulate her father, accusing the innocent girl of witchcraft and theft claiming that the jewelry she had was her own which she had locked in a safe in her room. Selena and her mother had been good to the whole community all along but the mayor conived with his daughter and planted witch items inside Selena's room, collected the jewelry from her and sentenced her to be set ablaze for witchcraft.
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While the young girl was imprisoned she denied knowing anything about witchcraft and confessed that the piece was a gift from paul who was courting her and by then he had arrived from his trip but he denied Selena's claims in order to protect his family's status so they had Selena's mother banished although she pleaded that they were innocent but all to no avail.
Before she gave up the ghost, Selena cursed the whole town to experience what she did until what belonged to her was rightfully returned, they didn't take it seriously but every twenty years, the curse haunted the people if Picador and was inherited by the same families that condemned her on that day and every one around them until this day because the Jewelry was never returned.
So, the curse goes on forever. Sad. A really great write-up.
Thanks and yes it does.
This is a very interesting story. I sense a great storyteller in you who can actually do much more. I believe you've stepped into the right community. With the @theinkwell you are sure to develop your skills.
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Oh... what tragedy! Poor Selena.
You know I always wondered how normal girls like her are still able to place curses on people. I thought she wasn't a witch huh?🙃
Awesome story though!
Thank you @zeraton It's karma though, the poor girl was innocent and was put to death.
Hello @ji33y, This story has a strong narrative arc and you explain the characters' motivation well. You certainly do address the prompt, inheritance. One thing you should be careful around is the violence. Setting someone 'ablaze' is pretty graphic. If you could tone that down somehow and in the future avoid such vividly violent images, it would be more compliant with the Ink Well culture.
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Action, Dialog and Narrative: The Dynamic Trio in our catalog of fiction writing tips.I liked your story, @ji33y. You handled a complicated narrative and characters well, and you have a great imagination. My suggestion is that you slow your stories down just a bit and provide more detail. A great resource that might help you is our article,
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