You always come up with something unique that plays out in an interesting way, @samsmith1971. And you infuse your stories with poetic and descriptive language.
There is a nothingness that consumes the scorched and bereft landscape. Devastation and death appear in abundance.
Great story. I loved it!
I'm with Jayna on this one; the desolation of the landscape was what captured me in this piece - and I enjoyed the verb choice of 'sequester' just as much as riverflows!
The metaphor of the piece was completely unexpected. As a structural feature, it made me wonder how you might have punctuated this piece with verses throughout. I did a second look through the piece, and you gave hints throughout the piece of where you were going, but only in hindsight did they click.
And as always, the tightness of the mechanics of the writing in this piece made is easy to read! Bravo!
Thanks Tim! I appreciate the support. Having your keen and watchful eye run over my posts occasionally is a blessing. I spent a fair bit of time editing and refining so I am pleased that this shows🤗 I truly appreciate that you saw fit to read it through twice in search of congruency and continuity; I do this kind of thing myself when faced with similar situations !LOLZ !ALIVE
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I appreciate these words of support from you Jayna. My writing simply follows my heart...and I think I have a love affair with words, truly... and when I find a new one that I like... yum💗 !ALIVE !PIZZA