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RE: The decision (ESP/ENG)

in The Ink Well4 years ago

Great story, @mayellig! I love it! It's spine tingling and a very fast-paced read. You have a gift for horror writing. Thank you for sharing your work in The Ink Well!

One note: some of the pronouns did not come through correctly in the translation. It's not a problem at all, as your stories are so easy to read and the translation is very good. I'll share these small edits in case you want to fix them. :-)

In these instances, "he" should be "she," "his" should be "hers" and "him" should be "her":

  • A bowl of cereal- he says.
  • He takes out the pitcher of milk
  • He hurries the spoonfuls and gets up to go upstairs to his room.
  • As she waits for him to open the door,
  • The light is off and he hears his grandmother's voice almost in a whisper.
  • Grandma, what's going on?- he asks again.
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Thanks for the details. I love knowing that you read my writings. Thanks for supporting my work ;)