Your writing is tight and well paced. Your story is interesting, original and shocking. You have a wonderful skill and should be encouraged at every turn. However, in The Ink Well we ask authors to refrain from stories about murder and abuse. Please read our rules : https://peakd.com/hive-170798/@theinkwell/important-faqs-about-the-ink-well-dos-and-donts-rules-and-tips