This is a story that fascinates the reader from start to finish. As we read we are not sure if what happens to Nathan are episodes of a psychotic condition, with delusions of magalomania and persecution, or if the appearance of a magical object opens the possibility of an expansion of the protagonist's consciousness.Hi, @yaziris.
The ending inclines us to the latter. (The mother receives a call (as happened in the husband's disappearance). In this reading the story is left open. We wonder how the riddle that was inside the box is solved , what happened to the lens, what links the grandfather, father and son...these are questions that can lead you to a larger writing project.
Congratulations on this writing.
Hi @gracielaacevedo.
I left the story open for 3 different interpretations. Linking the schizophrenic psychosis episodes to the extreme elevation of consciousness.
The story itself is an account of the inner thoughts of a Schizophrenic mind, with a twist that the typical delusional thinking of a schizophrenic ended up being a true "conspiracy theory".
The lens was the key that activated the schizophrenic genes. This is indicated by the protagonist's ability later on to get the psychotic episode without the need of the lens anymore. (And also hinted at by the relation to his grandfather and father)
The lens itself might be a little "magical" in that sense.
I totally agree with you there. And 2570 words would have needed to become 5000 to achieve that. 😁
Thank you so much for taking the time to read my story @gracielaacevedo. I really appreciate it. ❤