Hello @oluwashinaayomi,
You begin this story well. Your first line let's us know that the narrator has suffered some sort of physical harm. This line is also an invitation for the narrator to launch into a description of the events at the bank.
You use dialogue well, also. It drives the story forward. And, you share the narrator's state of mind and make his current state credible. I suggest that you separate paragraphs with a space. It makes reading easier.
It is a good, action-packed story. Thank you!
Thanks for reading through. I will try my best not to make the same mistake in my next story.
Thanks for you contribution, I really, really appreciate it.
The curation team loves to see writers grow. That's what we are all about. Ink Well is a little bit like a writing workshop. All the writers support and help each other. Sometimes that means making a helpful suggestion.Hello @oluwashinaayomi,
Looking forward to reading more of your stories. Hope you have a wonderful evening.