Gamble with Death @adaopara
3 years ago in The Ink Well by adaopara (44)
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Good story.
My be you'd want to correct one of your hashtags:
This is an interesting conflict you establish. Timothy has to decide if he is going to gamble for his grandfather's life. That is a temptation. Your change in point of view is a challenge, structurally. You do manage to convey the switch to readers, but the story gets a bit confusing in that place where you make the switch. Still, it is possible to sort the characters and that is a good thing.
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I guess if he loses that game
he loses his grandfather
and maybe his own life.
Yes, temptation and danger.
I hope Timothy plays the game well.
Or be ready to deal with his fears of loosing Shelby.